Eleven years of my life were spent growing up on an Island, literally. I went to a school that had 200 kids in the whole school. In the summer every hotel and house is full, but in the winter it becomes a ghost town with less than 30,000 people on the total island. Since I grew up there, I learned that the need for leadership often presented itself in certain situations and challenges. When I moved to Dallas and was looking for schools, I was frequently asked a lot a questions. The most common question was, “Speculate what has been your best accomplishment and relate it to your hardest one.” That question took a ton of thought because there were so many accomplishments to choose from for this question. The second time, and all times in the future, I was asked that question my response was, “My best accomplishment was shooting my first sporting clay. It was my favorite because I spent a lot of time trying to shoot it, then when I did shoot it, I felt genuinely good afterwards. My hardest accomplishment was cliff jumping into a cave. This was my hardest accomplishment because I kept on second guessing myself as to whether or not I could actually do the jump.” Both of these accomplishments were well thought out, difficult to achieve, but rewarding afterwards. Another question I received frequently was, “Imagine you could have one wish. What would it be and why?” This question was the hardest for me to answer because I could aim this question to my family and have it benefit them or aim it to help the world. This became my answer, “My one wish would be that all refugees from all wars and conflicts would be able to go home to a safe environment.” I chose this as my wish because I feel bad when I look at the Syrian Revolution and see that three million people had to flee their homes to stay alive. When I first came to ESD, pretty much every person in the whole grade asked what my old school was like verses ESD. This answer to this question came quite easily to me because I had thought about it a lot. My old school was a great deal smaller; my old grade was composed of thirty students, and it was the largest grade in the entire school. The whole school had an enrollment of 356 students. ESD has about 900 students in the whole school, ESD is three times the size of my old school! When I visited Parish Episcopal School, I met the principal fifteen minutes after entering the school. When we started talking, he asked me this question, “Summarize what person you look up to and why?” I told him that, “I look up the people who are in the military because they are risking their lives for people like me to enjoy freedom and rights.” When I lived in Newport, RI, my two closest friends and I went sailing a great deal. One day when we were sailing, one of my friends, Griffin, decided to try to capsize the boat. In so doing he slipped on the boat, hit his head, then fell overboard. Griffin is in the water and unconscious. His fall unbalanced the boat and capsized it. My other friend, Ben, who was still on the boat handed me a ship tie and told me to go swim after Griffin and tie the rope to him. After I did this, Ben had already righted the boat and was heading the boat towards Griffin and me. I hopped in the boat then grabbed the ship tie that was tied to Griffin and pulled him in. Now, whenever I go boating with Ben he is always the Skipper.
Commentary: I wrote this paper in the beginning of the year and you can see how there are multiple mistakes and also that I should combine some of these paragraphs.